hey guys,
Just did some re-working of the aniamtion I've been doing this week. I focused a bit more on editing since that is what I got the most comments about. This sequence is when the main character comes out of the bathroom of the bar drunk and finds a coin on the ground and puts it in the jukebox.
Let me know what you think. http://nickmation.com/Updated_Intro.mov
Cheers
Here is some updates....
Let me know what you think please.
http://nickmation.com/Capture_1.mov
On your first clip, your first cut is unmotivated. We have all the elements we need in the establishing shot, and then you cut to a low angle shot for an undefined reason. Then, that shot is so short before we see the POV of the coin that it ends up feeling like a jump cut.
The character work looks pretty good. Think a bit about how a drunk guy moves. Some of your motions are a bit too sharp for a drunk guy (the mouth wipe comes to mind, as does the antic before he pushes the button in the second clip). A drunk guy is constantly fighting gravity due to loss of equilibrium brought on by the alcohol.