I think it looks really good, I like the heroic camera angles and the slow mo parts. It's all a bit quick though, If you extend the pauses and slow down the slow parts it will make it a lot more dramatic. If you develop it further maybe in the final draft you could have other objects to slow down when it goes into slow mo just to make it more clear. But yeah it looks good maybe slow it down and play with the timing a little bit and it should be great.
Taking a second look, the bounce against the wall when he's hanging on the pipe looks a little weird, kinda like he's made of wood. Maybe have one uniform smack against the wall and a little squash to make him look more organic.And when he does those flips in the air it looks choppy i don't know if it's the framerate or what but the frames don't relate well perhaps have him do fewer flips or make his movements into them more uniform or blur them together.
i see u did a good job here...but i have some comments and crits...hope u don't mind...
let's start....
1ST:The slipping part...i see u didn't apply any kind of rotation to the hip,u just translate it...second when he slip he's off balance, so the character will try to re balance himself with his hand touching the ground as he's close to the ground so he will try to catch himself ..i suggest u get a reference for that action (slip)...
2ND:The fall...now that he will fall from the roof...he's trying not to fall...take care of the twins poses specially in hands...by the way arms r stiff a bit as i felt there aren't joints in those arms (remember he's a human)...also take care of ur hip timing in this pose...
3RD:He fell down..and he grab the pipe...he gives me the feeling that he knows that there is a pipe here and he will grab it...so audience don't worry i will surely grab the pipe...with both hands...:)...let him grab with one hand than the other (u r free to choose the way)... but give me the feeling that he will fall...Here he hit the wall, the timing is a bit off specially for the feet they stick to the wall i felt the wall is a magnet and the guy feet's r from metal...things r stiff a bit here...
4TH:Anticipation (prepare to jump)....he left the pipe for a while...preparing for the big jump...hey MR. he will fall..
5TH:The jump...is great but why all those back turns as he's wearing a flying machine that goes wrong...unbelievable movement..u can let him jump straight or something...i think u need a reference action here...
6TH:Heroic......u got a great heroic pose here...but the landing look a bit stiff...i couldn't get where the exact prob. is cause of the camera shaking...
Anyway give a great care to the squash and stretch things...that will let him more fleshy than woody..also take care of your extreme poses..don't forget ur arcs...and timing is in the subject...
I hope that will help u a bit...and also hope that u didn't hate me too..:)...good luck MR. and cheers.....
I think it looks really good, I like the heroic camera angles and the slow mo parts. It's all a bit quick though, If you extend the pauses and slow down the slow parts it will make it a lot more dramatic. If you develop it further maybe in the final draft you could have other objects to slow down when it goes into slow mo just to make it more clear. But yeah it looks good maybe slow it down and play with the timing a little bit and it should be great.
Taking a second look, the bounce against the wall when he's hanging on the pipe looks a little weird, kinda like he's made of wood. Maybe have one uniform smack against the wall and a little squash to make him look more organic.And when he does those flips in the air it looks choppy i don't know if it's the framerate or what but the frames don't relate well perhaps have him do fewer flips or make his movements into them more uniform or blur them together.
Hello Peng Jie,
i see u did a good job here...but i have some comments and crits...hope u don't mind...
let's start....
1ST:The slipping part...i see u didn't apply any kind of rotation to the hip,u just translate it...second when he slip he's off balance, so the character will try to re balance himself with his hand touching the ground as he's close to the ground so he will try to catch himself ..i suggest u get a reference for that action (slip)...
2ND:The fall...now that he will fall from the roof...he's trying not to fall...take care of the twins poses specially in hands...by the way arms r stiff a bit as i felt there aren't joints in those arms (remember he's a human)...also take care of ur hip timing in this pose...
3RD:He fell down..and he grab the pipe...he gives me the feeling that he knows that there is a pipe here and he will grab it...so audience don't worry i will surely grab the pipe...with both hands...:)...let him grab with one hand than the other (u r free to choose the way)... but give me the feeling that he will fall...Here he hit the wall, the timing is a bit off specially for the feet they stick to the wall i felt the wall is a magnet and the guy feet's r from metal...things r stiff a bit here...
4TH:Anticipation (prepare to jump)....he left the pipe for a while...preparing for the big jump...hey MR. he will fall..
5TH:The jump...is great but why all those back turns as he's wearing a flying machine that goes wrong...unbelievable movement..u can let him jump straight or something...i think u need a reference action here...
6TH:Heroic......u got a great heroic pose here...but the landing look a bit stiff...i couldn't get where the exact prob. is cause of the camera shaking...
Anyway give a great care to the squash and stretch things...that will let him more fleshy than woody..also take care of your extreme poses..don't forget ur arcs...and timing is in the subject...
I hope that will help u a bit...and also hope that u didn't hate me too..:)...good luck MR. and cheers.....